Weird Things Start Happening....
It was a normal day at my house, just like normal you would see the Martin family out and about either riding bikes or playing catch,and that's what we did.We kids rode are bikes as ma was cooking the most delicious meal on earth,whatever that was.Today seemed perfectly normal,but it wasn't.This was the day everything would change.Today I became the chosen one.It all started when the crows started honking up a storm.All the folk in town didn't seem to notice,even my family was still off doing their little thing.Then cars started whizzing through town.Weird,I thought,just a second ago it was as quiet as the grave itself,now,in a couple of seconds Hills bury drive had practically a traffic jam.I knew that it was all a dream,but I knew it was dream.I sat down on the porch and tried to find out what in the name of tarnishes was going on.Then,out of the blue,the trees started talking about what was going on.They said that I was the "chosen one"well one of em'.Why was I the chosen one?And what did it mean?The trees soon answered,they said that I,and only I,could save the world.What about the other kids I wondered,then I felt like I was stronger then I really was,The trees told me great forces were entering my body,and I had to keep it away from the world,and I had to use it to save the world on a deadline,too.But how?When?Why?There were to many questions for them to answer.They slowly became trees again,I couldn't think about that now,I had to save the world and faster than a road runner running from a coyote.
I love your story but i would like if you gave the readers a little more knowledge about your story!
ReplyDelete~Elle
I love the voice in this piece! I can hear a bit of Southern accent and am getting an idea of the character's personality. Mrs.Goins
ReplyDeleteThat is a really good story, I really want to see what happens next!
ReplyDelete- Adria
You discribed the story well. I can't wait to see what will happen next. :)
ReplyDelete-Dennis K.
hey its Mathew i think you did really good i hope you make part 2 i wonder what will happen next
ReplyDeleteGreat post, but you need to explain WHY the world needs to be saved.
ReplyDelete-Jack
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DeleteHey Jack I will make sure to put that in number four! -speedy gonzales
DeleteI love the detail expetaly in the line "This was the day everthing would change' it hooked me
ReplyDelete-Kaleb
Wow. I like it. Good detail and has good personality to it! Two thumbs up!
ReplyDelete--Lisa